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Tim Knopf's avatar

"Maria grabbed Andelbert in an embrace." Something feels a bit awkward with this sentence. And "Maria embraced Andelbert" doesn't fully communicate the love and the fear well enough. Perhaps "Maria seized Andelbert in a quick embrace". Or, "Maria quickly embraced Andelbert". I don't know...what do you think?

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Mark Starlin's avatar

It is bit awkward, now that you pointed it out. 🤣 Seized sound too military for me. How about "Maria clutched Andelbert in a strong embrace." "Maria clutched Andelbert in a tight embrace." Or "Maria grasped Andelbert in a strong embrace." Or "Maria tightly clutched Andelbert."

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I like clutched better than seized. "Maria clutched Andelbert in a hasty embrace"? What kind of embrace was it? A loving embrace? I feel like we're getting closer, just not there yet. If only I had read romance novels, this might be easier. Would one of your writing collegues have an idea?

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Mark Starlin's avatar

"Maria clutched Andelbert in a strong embrace." or "Maria clutched Andelbert in a tight embrace."

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Mark Starlin's avatar

Desperate embrace?

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Cyn Taylor's avatar

Love this episode!!!

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Mark Starlin's avatar

Thanks, Cyn. Things never seem to go according to plan with those two. 🤣

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