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This was great. Loved introduction of the time cops, the amount of revelations we got about what's been going on, and more importantly that ending! Can't wait to see where the next entry takes all of this. Could have done without the advertising but you brought it back around pretty well at the end there so I'll give it a pass lol. Another phenomenal entry!

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Thanks Ryan. The Substack plug was just a little fun since it was The Great Substack Story Challenge. I am glad you enjoyed it. 🤓

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I liked this, especially the ending!

I’m also all for no more stories (or less stories) putting in iPhone references as I think they’re a bit clumsy. Super pumped for time travel in the story now we can open her up and let her fly!

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Jun 18, 2022·edited Jun 18, 2022Author

Thanks Thomas. I agree. I didn’t see the need for the Apple bashing. I just tried to balance it out. Hopefully, now it can be ignored. 🤓 We will see. 🤣

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Yes hopefully 👍

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Nicely done, Mark! And with our first time hop, we can say the "Time" portion of our title has been fulfilled! Who knew that Joey wasn't just a man out of his element, but a man out of time as well! 😮

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Thanks, Anthony. I wanted to get back to the "time travel" element of the opening paragraph. And of course, address all the Apple-bashing going on. 🤣

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Jun 16, 2022Liked by Mark Starlin

I am totally impressed by the continuation of this story as each writer has developed and brought to light a tangent plot line! I look forward to Thursdays and each new chapter!

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Thanks, Todd. It was a challenge, but also a lot of fun. 🤓

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