[times like this I miss Medium’s highlight & comment feature] “As we were enjoying our stroll, a young woman approached us and smiled.” The baron would know Nora, so this feels odd. OTOH, the reader does not, so “Nora approached” doesn’t work at all. And “Nora, a young woman, approached” is awful. Maybe “Elise asked me, ‘Do you know that young woman approaching? She seems to know you.’” Something like that?
“So am I. It feels like a dream I will surely wake up from." Considering what I now know of the baron, I believe he would say, “So am I. It feels like a dream from which I will surely awaken."
[times like this I miss Medium’s highlight & comment feature] “As we were enjoying our stroll, a young woman approached us and smiled.” The baron would know Nora, so this feels odd. OTOH, the reader does not, so “Nora approached” doesn’t work at all. And “Nora, a young woman, approached” is awful. Maybe “Elise asked me, ‘Do you know that young woman approaching? She seems to know you.’” Something like that?
“So am I. It feels like a dream I will surely wake up from." Considering what I now know of the baron, I believe he would say, “So am I. It feels like a dream from which I will surely awaken."