A few thoughts -I like your chapters as they are. - I stopped about halfway up. You don't need the word "up"- Although it did "seem to" shrink a little after living at the palace of Versailles.”-“Then you are in luck; I have a loaf in the oven as we speak.” Don't need "as we speak." -I rose, hurried out of the dining hall, and walked toward the kitchen -
I like your short chapters when I'm reading before bedtime. I don't have to hurry to finish a chapter (because Deb closed her book) when I only need to read another page or two.
I like them also. As I can write a chapter in one sitting. It seems to work better for me than long chapters. I don't see any downside to them. This is an 18th century blacksmith's version of a novel, anyway. He don't know the "rules."
I just finished another chapter which I will post tomorrow morning.
Agreed, I don't need the word "up." Adding "seemed to" is probably a good idea also. Although I am not sure the Baron would say that. He is not always literal. LOL! I do think Andelbert would add, "as we speak." He is trying to be a "proper" butler. And that may be his version of formal language.
I suppose I could combine the first and second chapters into one chapter. But I like the idea of roughly 1000-word "scenes" as chapters. That was the pattern in the first novel. Plus, I tend to write that length per sitting. So it feels natural. And it will make it easier to serialize the novel later.
A few thoughts -I like your chapters as they are. - I stopped about halfway up. You don't need the word "up"- Although it did "seem to" shrink a little after living at the palace of Versailles.”-“Then you are in luck; I have a loaf in the oven as we speak.” Don't need "as we speak." -I rose, hurried out of the dining hall, and walked toward the kitchen -
I think sticking with short chapter is the way to go with this series. A couple of my readers told me they appreciated the short chapters in BBB.
I like your short chapters when I'm reading before bedtime. I don't have to hurry to finish a chapter (because Deb closed her book) when I only need to read another page or two.
I like them also. As I can write a chapter in one sitting. It seems to work better for me than long chapters. I don't see any downside to them. This is an 18th century blacksmith's version of a novel, anyway. He don't know the "rules."
I just finished another chapter which I will post tomorrow morning.
Thanks, Jack. I appreciate your comments.
Agreed, I don't need the word "up." Adding "seemed to" is probably a good idea also. Although I am not sure the Baron would say that. He is not always literal. LOL! I do think Andelbert would add, "as we speak." He is trying to be a "proper" butler. And that may be his version of formal language.
All good suggestions, Cyn. Thanks.
I suppose I could combine the first and second chapters into one chapter. But I like the idea of roughly 1000-word "scenes" as chapters. That was the pattern in the first novel. Plus, I tend to write that length per sitting. So it feels natural. And it will make it easier to serialize the novel later.